Episode 15 Commentary

So we see Mira having a one-night stand in the first few frames. We then wonder what made her like Soo-bong. He doesn’t have the logical qualities that women say they want. He doesn’t event have the bad boy charisma that women actually want. Mira could practically get and guy, except for Soo-bong.

#8 I’m not sure if you intended this scene to be funny, but I do find it funny. Mira doing her part to do a make-over with Yoon-hee. It’s obviously not because she wants the best for her, but it’s somehow connected with her ego.

The end of frame #13 is Mira embracing Yon-hee. I had a hard time keeping with the flashbacks. If #13 is just a few days after Mira was out from the hospital, perhaps the one-night stand was a flash back and only serves for characterization, unless we’re going to meet that bloke again.

#14 it’s amusing how Yoon-hee thinks of the situation on how to save the hero of Queen of Darkness, Wang Shin. Unknowingly, she will be dragged into it later as now she becomes co-creator.

The phrase ‘she has to be more beautiful than Cha Yu-son!’ is key. Let’s recall that the creator of Butterfly Girl was channeling her frustrated romance with Prof Park. What if Wang Shin represents Soo-bong in this manhwa and Cha Yu-son represents Mira?

Thus, Cha is being icy against Wang Shin in the same way that she felt scorned by Soo-bong.

At this point, she’s clueless that Soo-bong now have Ren-bo as his beloved.  

I can anticipate that the new character would infuriate Mira so much.

#17

We can see Mira’s conversation with an old lady, that Queen of Darkness is very important to her. With what I wrote above, then it’s also possible that the Queen of Darkness is Cha Yu-son’s alter ego in the manhwa and represents her hatred towards Soo-bong.

#18 so the shooting part was only in her imagination, but she clearly has anger issues

#20 Now we see the new character as a fat princess, one that represents Yoon-hee, which is contrary to my expectations. I’m starting to doubt my earlier hypothesis that Yoon-hee will be dragged to the manhwa considering that this new character represents herself.

Mira will get really angry with this one.

#21 I do remember that this Young-sik was one of the two journalists. It’s too random to see him here, but I suppose this is to open another narrative thread.

#27

Then we’re being distracted by writernim’s lecture on screenwriting.

I am slogging through the filming scenes. I know it’s funny and by itself there’s nothing wrong with it. But with two things that you want to know what would happen next — 1) Soo-bong and Renbo’s fate, 2) the latest on the Queen of Darkness — I have to admit that I’m rather bored with these scenes.

#31 on pure ideas. Before I read the rest of this frame, I am getting the sense that Yeonjoo is trying to pick Song Jae-jung’s brain on how to have ‘pure ideas’ and thereby help in continuing Butterfly Girl. I hope I’m not wrong that this scene takes place some time after ‘the end’ of Butterfly Girl.

(Upon reading further, yes, the lecture is not a flashback.)

#32 We see Kangchul and Mira meeting. At the end of the previous frame, it’s hinted that someone else could unlock the pure idea in Butterfly Girl. I hate to see that it will be Mira who will do that, but anything is now possible.

#34 how the hell did Do-yoon get to the real world?

….ok, #35 answers that. Kangchul took him to the real world.

#41 Oh yeah! Where was Fairy Spark? When she was dragged to the real world, I can’t remember if she was able to return back. If she’s in the real world all this time, then she could be the key.

Also, the duo are doing a good job providing as another perspective.

#45 This episode ended with Yoon-hee being transported to the manhwa with the identity of the new character.

It’s mostly boring but necessary to the plot. Now I’m excited to see how Mira would react to the new character. I can only expect outrage.

Also, these boring two episodes have done enough groundwork for the Queen of Darkness becoming alive arc.

The fate of Butterfly Girl can wait for now, but there remains that nagging question on what’s the significance of the flash forward in Episode 13?

Furthermore, who will be the resource person that can unlock the ‘pure idea’ that can continue Butterfly Girl?

• • Enchanteur

    Saturday 14th January 2023 at 19:24
    

    #2. This is not a flashback (and it's not marked as one). In episode 8, she calls this guy on the phone. Her "Oppa" for fun.

     

    #8. Yes, it wasn't meant to be especially funny, but the important thing is that you find it funny. Some unintentional humor in the way Yoon-Hee falls into a trap that makes her a vamp.

     

    #13. If you have trouble with flashbacks... it makes me feel better that my screenplay isn't as elaborate as Song Jae-Jung's. Because it's quite unreadable, her flashback montages are so complex. On the other hand, we manage to understand on the screen (um, sometimes with difficulty).

    Here, the moment of the flashback doesn't matter, it's a moment that took place the year before. They know each other. Maybe three months or six months after they met.

     

    #14. A difficult scene to write because there are many monologues. And it has to seem fairly realistic because people don't usually monologue. 

    As you can see, it's not a mystery that Yoon-Hee will be drawn into the manhwa (although a twist is always possible). The lesson I take from W (SJJ's script) is: when something is predictable, make it better than what the audience can predict. I'm not sure I succeed, but I'm making every effort to!

     

    #17. I should have put "Imagination" in the scene-header. It's ok if the screenplay goes into production. But for a reader, it's better to spare the surprise. After hesitating, I decided to go for the reading.

     

    #21. It's true, I had trouble placing this scene. The best I could do was to take advantage of the shot on Yoon-Hee's tablet to make the transition to the tablet on the floor. After considering the timeline of the episode, this was still the best place. It allows a moment outside of Yoon-Hee to show how what she does next (later) evolves.

     

    #27. Here, the original script was terribly badly written. The scene three times longer. I summarized it as much as possible. Putting in some comedy (SJJ depresses her students) and getting to the point of pure ideas. What Yeon-Joo is interested in to save her manhwa.

     

    #32. This is a chance encounter. Very badly done in my first version. But here I put logical links that explain it. The film set is located near Mi-Ra's sauna in Gangnam (previous scenes).

     

    #34. And yes. Here I did this thanks to the corrections. The original scenes were bad. But here, it is a process used by Song Jae-Jung often. An unexpected situation, the explanation in flashback then. And even a flashback in reverse time (similar to the one in W when Kang Chul tells how he got the manhwa volume 34). I didn't put the reverse time just for fun, but because the last scene (so the first one) was the most important: how they resolved their argument, and why Do-Yoon is here.

     

    #41. The duo brings little, I'm stuck with the fact that we mustn't lose sight of them completely (for the continuation). So they have two very short scenes, comedy oriented (anyway, it's one of their main function).

    Fairy Spark was stuck in the real world. Episode 10, Yeon-Joo explains how she got back to the world of "Butterfly Girl", she accompanied Soo-Bong while he teleported there. 

     

    As your conclusion says. Thanks to the changes and corrections, I was able to concentrate all of this in these two episodes. Trying to have the best scenes to keep the attention. The episodes with expositions or "after the shock" type are always slower. Those are very busy with various contents. It's interesting to know your expectations. It not only motivates me, it gives me an idea of how I can fix the next episodes. The audience's eye is more important than anyone else's, including other screenwriters' opinions.